ext_30007 ([identity profile] rijane99.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] comment_fic 2009-05-14 06:05 am (UTC)

Great work! You've got hot and fun and solid characters.

"I'm me, Ange. Who else would I sound like?"
This sounds precisely like Brennan :)

I love the imagery of the "deep red bow" - both sexual and visually accurate. Fantastic!

Brennan's sixth and last lucid thought of the evening is that they're both right. Ange does have soft lips and kahlua tastes amazing on them.
Great ending - holds to the theme and evokes the sex and the senses.

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