Tuesday - On The Road

[be-themoon.livejournal.com]

Hey everyone! I'm be_themoon , guest-hosting this week. Firstly, thanks to monica_catch22 for stepping in for me yesterday. Secondly! Today's theme is On The Road - road trips, commuting to work, driving home for the holidays, going across country for a job - any way you want to spin it!

You guys know the rules: No more than 5 prompts, and only 3 prompts per fandom unless someone answers one of your prompts.

No spoilers in your prompt until a week after air-date - if there are spoilers in your story, you need to warn and leave three spaces.

And of course, remember the format! Fandom, Character/Character, prompt.

Supernatural, Dean/Castiel, three hundred miles to the next job
Chronicles of Narnia, Susan, she doesn't take the train anymore
Merlin, author's choice, road trip AU

If none of the prompts catch your interest, take a gander at the Lonely Prompts Listing on delicious and adopt a few!

[Theme tag="ontheroad"]

Comments

[jennytork.livejournal.com]

She doesn't take the train anymore.

She drives her new car, or one of her many suitors drives her. She's more interested in them and being charmed and flattered than she is her brothers and sister and that silly game they used to play.

She's not sure why they insist on still playing it.

Pretending to be kings and queens of a mythical land was the stuff of childhood. She's much too grown up for that now.

Now, what matters is boys and the exciting world she has in front of her. All she has to do is flirt and pretend she has no brain. And if they want to do things with her body and if she lets them because it gets her what she wants, what business is that of anyone's?

Susan knows what will get her ahead in this world.

She knows what reality is.

And she has no clue that the game was the true reality. That 'real life' was an illusion of the senses and that she is nothing but drunk on her own self.

She is so blind that she doesn't see that what matters are the things boys and pleasure can't provide.

Susan doesn't know reality any longer. She's deluded and blind.

She has gone insane.

And her brothers and sister grieve for her.

As does a majestic Lion a world away.

[rocketgirl2.livejournal.com]

Ooh, I really like this. There are a couple of places where you have tense issues, but overall, it's well written. I can just picture the Susan you wrote--it's very sad, but realistic. Good job. :)

[jennytork.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

I'm glad you picked up on the tense issues -- honestly, it was done that way on purpose to show how disjointed her thoughts have become. I hope it was effective and didn't jar you out of the story!

[jennytork.livejournal.com]

WHOOPS. Let me amend that to "done on purpose EXCEPT where I put 'real life WAS' instead of IS." THAT one was an honest-to-goodness goof! Thanks for catching it!

*laughing at herself*