so I'm reading this fic on ff.net and it barely makes decent. has 3 chapters and the flow is all over the place. chock full of spelling errors
then out of left field there's mpreg! NO WARNING! I don't have a problem with mpreg, but dude, warn for it so I don't think the whole thing is hokey (which in this fic its just utter crap with how it was written)
the news is sprung on Danny and he doesn't freak out and then immediately wants to tell Chin and Kono. no set up, no "you may want to sit down"
at this point (towards the end of the 2nd chapter) it's like an on going train wreck and I'm watching it unfold.
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you gotta warn for stuff like that!
Oct. 27th, 2011 08:06 amthen out of left field there's mpreg! NO WARNING! I don't have a problem with mpreg, but dude, warn for it so I don't think the whole thing is hokey (which in this fic its just utter crap with how it was written)
the news is sprung on Danny and he doesn't freak out and then immediately wants to tell Chin and Kono. no set up, no "you may want to sit down"
at this point (towards the end of the 2nd chapter) it's like an on going train wreck and I'm watching it unfold.